WALT choose words that describe a moment for the reader
YOUR SIGNS OF SUCCESS
begin in the action
present tense (I am, not I was)
short, sharp sentences
uses the senses (smell, taste, look, hear, touch)
The day I play on that frosty morning
I standin the middle of the court. The wind blows rapidly it is like I am court in a dust storm. I am in my position. Then there goes the whistle. I am in wing attack and I am getting passed the ball.I jump up to catch the ball. I get it. I bound it to the person beside me and a big girl from the other team that we are playing. She jumped and swamp!!! She smacked the ball with hand and the ball went flying across the court and into the hand of my hands. After a long time that felt forever the whistle blew for half time. I saw fresh juicy oranges for our team . Yum Yum Yum. Then my coach shouts trying to be heard over the crowd Bree yours is center. I love to play center. I can smell hot chips from across the road. It gives me a boost of energy. For the rest of the game I play my best for thinking that we are going to win. All of a sudden the whistle blows and the game is done. The score is 9 12. Well done you guys says my coach. You won. My mum comes and gives me a great big hug and after we have done doing the player of the day we go home.
Today I just got my fist pen pal letter from U.S.A. It was so cool, we were just randomly reading then one of the teachers come in and said special delivery that was for us. My favourite part was it was on the
Today I finished 5 things about me. This a slide show of it. I did a title page, a who is your role model, one thing that I like to do with my family, my favourite place and why, my hobbies, my favourite food.
Eddie is a otter a very clever because he was rescued from the wild in the 2000 ‘s. He is 16 year old in 2011 he had an X ray he got told that he some arthritis in his elbows so the doctors suggested that he should do something to kept them moving so they thought that basketball would be good. In a week he was able to shoot a hoop he hardly ever misses and when he does he kept on trying.He does not show the people at the Zoo that he play basketball he because it is for his health.