Beans Moment (Energy)
WALT choose words that describe a moment for the reader
YOUR SIGNS OF SUCCESS
- begin in the action
- present tense (I am, not I was)
- short, sharp sentences
- uses the senses (smell, taste, look, hear, touch)
- strong verbs
The day I play on that frosty morning
I stand in the middle of the court. The wind blows rapidly it is like I am court in a dust storm. I am in my position. Then there goes the whistle. I am in wing attack and I am getting passed the ball.I jump up to catch the ball. I get it. I bound it to the person beside me and a big girl from the other team that we are playing. She jumped and swamp!!! She smacked the ball with hand and the ball went flying across the court and into the hand of my hands. After a long time that felt forever the whistle blew for half time. I saw fresh juicy oranges for our team . Yum Yum Yum. Then my coach shouts trying to be heard over the crowd Bree yours is center. I love to play center. I can smell hot chips from across the road. It gives me a boost of energy. For the rest of the game I play my best for thinking that we are going to win. All of a sudden the whistle blows and the game is done. The score is 9 12. Well done you guys says my coach. You won. My mum comes and gives me a great big hug and after we have done doing the player of the day we go home.
